Fixer-Upper

Today we will feature a sentence that needs to be fixed. This is called a fixer-upper, and yes, that word is hyphenated, according to Merriam-Webster (which is also hyphenated, not a first and last name).

Fixer-Upper Opportunity:

The same is true for other well locations situated nearby Spindletop.

The first thing that hit me is the use of “nearby” instead of “near.”

Nearby means “close at hand.” It is an adjective or adverb.

Near means “close to,” and it is a preposition, which means it takes an object.

Now, let’s look at the sentence and see if “close at hand” fits better than “close to” before Spindletop. If you leave the word “Spindletop” in there, then “close to” fits better; whereas if you leave the word “Spindletop” out, then “close at hand” fits better. Thus, there are two ways we can fix the latter part of the sentence:

1)      …situated near Spindletop.

2)      …situated nearby.

The second thing that hit me is that “well locations situated” seemed repetitively redundant.

Having chosen Option #1 above, there are several ways we can fix this part of the sentence:

1)      …other wells situated near Spindletop.

2)      …other well locations near Spindletop.

3)      …other wells located near Spindletop.

4)      …other wells near Spindletop.

Being a fan of brevity, I would edit our fixer-upper to one of the following:

1)      The same is true for other wells near Spindletop.

2)      The same is true for other nearby wells.
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Funny Quote of the Day:

“To be sure of hitting the target, shoot first, and call whatever you hit the target.”

– Ashleigh Brilliant, British author and cartoonist, b. 1933, now US citizen living in California

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